H20 was Awesome. As I was in the lazy river trying to grip onto the side of the wall successfully. Doing it but then getting shoved by a random kid which got me stuck in a hoard of kids then we went on the bus back to our cabins to sleep for the next day.
Hi Dion,
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear you enjoyed your time at H20! You have used some lovely language to describe your time at the lazy river 'grip', 'shoved', 'hoard' which is great as it helps me to get a real sense of what it was like for you. One thing you could do to improve your writing is to read it out to yourself and LISTEN for where you sentences begin and end (if you can't hear this yourself, get a friend to read it to you and see if you can hear the pauses then). This will help you know where to put your full stops and end of sentence punctuation.
Have a lovely week :)
Miss H
Hi Dion it is Connor here from Awahono School looks like you had fun. Next time can you add more pitcher so we can see what else you did were are you going on your next camp.
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HI my Name is K@R$0N and I a from edmund hillary school and was it a fun esperance to go to the pools and
ReplyDeletesa ia malie alu i le vaieli ma le a faifa oe fai GREAT WORK
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